The uncut version is a bit fussier.
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It's a bit dry right now, but I trust that you can tie this together and whip it into shape.
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This coy withholding is getting you nowhere.
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The introduction of the pool boy is perhaps overly ambitious.
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Really nice, tight opening, and just the right amount of tension. Things get juicy right away. Huge improvement over last time; I think this is one for your portfolio!
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This isn't quite ready to show people.
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If you're ready to submit, I have some people to introduce you to.
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I feel like you're overly influenced by Phillip Roth here.
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Honestly, it's just SO hard pull off something with this many settings and generations.
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If your family is going to see this, you might want to change some of the names.
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