Alright folks here are the first two DRAFT chapters of the alternate ending to Ra. Let me know what you think. Any or all of this could be final; anything could be changed if the feedback is compelling enough. Read on or don't https://qntm.org/files/ra/end2/happen.html … https://qntm.org/files/ra/end2/phree.html …
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Replying to @qntm
High level: Plot feel like it orbits saving Rachel. Little narrative reaction to failing that. Nat as protagonist switch works better here. Oddly, might want to edit up Hatt. 60s is weird time. Can King fix this? Why not King go to core if so? Future nice touch. Happy. Tweet smal
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Replying to @Thallori
* Not sure what to change regarding Rachel. * Nat as protagonist is 100% intentional (see earlier chapter title, "Protagonism"), so glad that's working. * This is probably not Hatt's final appearance/mention.
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* Sixty seconds seems reasonable to me, it's a crowded opener. * King's idea of fixing this (the only thing he can realistically do) is to go to Sirius, muster an army and come back. Perhaps I should clarify his thoughts.
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