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High level: Plot feel like it orbits saving Rachel. Little narrative reaction to failing that. Nat as protagonist switch works better here. Oddly, might want to edit up Hatt. 60s is weird time. Can King fix this? Why not King go to core if so? Future nice touch. Happy. Tweet smal
* Not sure what to change regarding Rachel. * Nat as protagonist is 100% intentional (see earlier chapter title, "Protagonism"), so glad that's working. * This is probably not Hatt's final appearance/mention.
* Sixty seconds seems reasonable to me, it's a crowded opener. * King's idea of fixing this (the only thing he can realistically do) is to go to Sirius, muster an army and come back. Perhaps I should clarify his thoughts.
Not certain what to change with Rachel either. It feels anti-climatic, but not exactly intentionally. There isn't much impact, which might come down to the other characters' reactions more than anything else. Magically fixing everything got a chuckle, but maybe not what you want.
Hatt just feels a bit.. Inserted(?) here. The parenthesised paragraph doesn't quite flow with the rest of the action, but I'd hate to get rid of the exploding world line.
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