Post the 1st paragraph of the book you're writing in the replies below.
I'll tell you what works, what doesn't work, and how to fix it.
Let's GOOOOOOOO 
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It seems to me that you could just break it into two sentences at the comma and that would ameliorate the preposition-induced complexity.
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