Please take what Im going to say with a rock of salt
Going through @HooaFury ‘s SAGA training, he stresses the power of the first line.
If it was *ME* I would take the first five words away and let the paragraph flow faster.
Again, It’s just a personal observation.
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Got an editor working on it as we speak. The best writers pay someone mean to tell them their work sucks
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