117/ chapter 2: The taupe-carpeted corridor that ran down the center of the West Wing was quiet. Senator Linda Haig looked at her watch. Almost half an hour late. Hardly surprising; that woman was never -
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118/ chapter 3 Allan looked up. The next handhold was just a short reach up the wall. He stretched for it - and the suit alarm went off. Damn it. He silenced the warble tone, cleared the flashing "overheating"
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119/ Each of these has a few adjectives, a few sensory images. Chapter 1 is a bit of an outlier, with more detail than the others, because I have to drop the reader in media res, explaining a moon colony, an Earth in economic decline, etc. all in 1 paragraph.
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120/ Chapter 2 announces "taupe carpeted...West Wing... quiet". Tell me you didn't fill in the off-white walls, the wainscotting, the tasteful end tables with lamps, the plaster work on the ceiling. I said enough ; you pictured it.
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121/ So flip back to Bad Author's writing. We have no idea what the action actually looked like ... but we know the color of - his pistol - his armor - the gaps between the plates - his loincloth - his cape - the gilding on his armor - the gunbelt - the cross - the chitin
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121/ ok, pop quiz: was the cross red, the gunbelt brown, the power armor gun metal gray, and the loincloth maroon, or was the armor gray, the belt red, the cross maroon, and the cross brown? answer: it doesn't matter, not at all, and so every word of description was wasted
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ⓘ Dogs don't have thumbs Retweeted J.A. Sutherland SciFi Books
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J.A. Sutherland SciFi Books @JASutherlandBksThis. Trust the reader. Give them just a bit of flavor and they'll fill in the whole meal. I very rarely describe characters appearance, and then only if it's some particular point I want to make about them, coding appearance for personality, say. Moreover, readers will 1/ https://twitter.com/MorlockP/status/1253045854350577666 …Show this thread1 reply 0 retweets 2 likesShow this thread -
ⓘ Dogs don't have thumbs Retweeted José Camões Silva
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José Camões Silva @josecamoessilvaReplying to @MorlockP @JASutherlandBksY'know, there are these things called 'blogs,' like a twitter thread but easier to read; you could start one, I dunno call it "dispatches from Morlockistan," and post these things there without the limitations of 280 characters. Then you make an off-color joke…
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124/ Agreeing w
@JASutherlandBks about appearance, and adding a thought: often the best way to hint at appearance is to describe behavior or character. If I mention an engineer doing CAD, you will fill in a look that resonates FOR YOU. If I mention a retired veteran ...4 replies 1 retweet 5 likesShow this thread -
Replying to @MorlockP @JASutherlandBks
You’re partnering with the reader. You fill the story with what they want to hear from you; you let them fill details with what they want. Wisdom/success is drawing the line well. Brilliance is persuading them to want to fill gaps with what you want them to discover there.
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