103/ maybe they were whitepic.twitter.com/vHmSwFQgXs
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114/ ...and even then, as he looks at the conduits and lighting panels, no words are wasted on the colors or filigree. If you pictured the lighting panels while reading it, great. If not, great. Either way, you got as much as you needed for the story to work.
115/ This is pretty decent. As I wrote I tried to set each scene and PoV hard in the first paragraph. I aimed to always deliver the PoV character's name and then had that character observe at least two sensory details about the scene.https://twitter.com/Laserpig_Utopia/status/1253048365752909824 …
116/ The sky above the spaceport was as black as a freshly bored lunar tunnel before the lights were installed. Earth hung overhead, the once-bright cities...glowing dimly w low-energy bulbs and rolling brown-outs. Except California. California was dark. Mike Martin squinted
117/ chapter 2: The taupe-carpeted corridor that ran down the center of the West Wing was quiet. Senator Linda Haig looked at her watch. Almost half an hour late. Hardly surprising; that woman was never -
118/ chapter 3 Allan looked up. The next handhold was just a short reach up the wall. He stretched for it - and the suit alarm went off. Damn it. He silenced the warble tone, cleared the flashing "overheating"
119/ Each of these has a few adjectives, a few sensory images. Chapter 1 is a bit of an outlier, with more detail than the others, because I have to drop the reader in media res, explaining a moon colony, an Earth in economic decline, etc. all in 1 paragraph.
120/ Chapter 2 announces "taupe carpeted...West Wing... quiet". Tell me you didn't fill in the off-white walls, the wainscotting, the tasteful end tables with lamps, the plaster work on the ceiling. I said enough ; you pictured it.
121/ Chapter 3, mountain climbing on the moon - you've seen Apollo photos. You've seen rock climbing. You've seen bulky space suit gloves. You can supply the dust being knocked off of the stone finger holds, the chalky gray / white rocks, the dark clefts. I don't need to.
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