Real Script Notes:
We need more action before the tease.
Her line "Oh my God! Fire!" is a bit on the nose.
Would she use the term "missiles"? Sounds too professional.
We need a few more succinct George Kennedy moments.
The ending is a little cliffhangery. Was this intentional?
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I love “Was this intentional?” Like you left the ending wide open because you just…forgot to end the story?
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"Would she use the term "missiles"? Sounds too professional."
Maybe use a less "professional" term like...
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Sounds like someone was trying too hard to find fault with the script.
Good news though, if THAT bs is all they could come up with, then that was one VERY WELL WRITTEN script.
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When she says “Take off. Nuke the entire site from orbit”, do we really need the exposition of “Its the only way to be sure”?
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How about
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Are these all for the same moment or throughout episode? Because if it’s for the same moment - my head would be spinning 🤣. And I can’t wait to see what the final product is.
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I legitimately only know George Kennedy from the Naked Gun films so I feel like I would have taken this note entirely wrong
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